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− | ''The smell of the pine-resin is aromatic, like incense as I pour you another Scotch, the taste is smoky and harsh with numerous hints of peat. Lively strains of Strauss, pour through the darkened house as the antique phonograph spins its way through the Tales of the Vienna Woods. As we talk in hushed tones, it wouldn't do for other people hear us talk of these dark matters, the cold autumn wind vibrates the glass panes in their Victorian wood frames. I point out that Tremen is far stronger than most Kindred his age, he has grown strong on stolen vitae and the memories of those he has diablerized. His is an enthralling tale, born in part due to the excesses of modern warfare and partly in the arcane black blood that runs through his veins.''
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| Funny you should say just this. I wrote this stuff earlier today and was going back over it in my mind on how I wanted to fill in the description. The danger in writing I a known short time span is that I want to get a lot down in a short amount of time...so I drop stuff out I would otherwise put in. Your criticism is well marked. '''Keith 20:00 MST, 27 March, 2018''' | | Funny you should say just this. I wrote this stuff earlier today and was going back over it in my mind on how I wanted to fill in the description. The danger in writing I a known short time span is that I want to get a lot down in a short amount of time...so I drop stuff out I would otherwise put in. Your criticism is well marked. '''Keith 20:00 MST, 27 March, 2018''' |
- Detroit Musings
Freaking Awesome blog! I laughed my ass off the entire way. And the best part, is its all true. -- "The Magister 23:34, 19 October 2017 (MDT)"
Funny you should say just this. I wrote this stuff earlier today and was going back over it in my mind on how I wanted to fill in the description. The danger in writing I a known short time span is that I want to get a lot down in a short amount of time...so I drop stuff out I would otherwise put in. Your criticism is well marked. Keith 20:00 MST, 27 March, 2018