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Revision as of 13:27, 8 May 2018
Freaking Awesome blog! I laughed my ass off the entire way. And the best part, is its all true. -- "The Magister 23:34, 19 October 2017 (MDT)"
Funny you should say just this. I wrote this stuff earlier today and was going back over it in my mind on how I wanted to fill in the description. The danger in writing I a known short time span is that I want to get a lot down in a short amount of time...so I drop stuff out I would otherwise put in. Your criticism is well marked. Keith 20:00 MST, 27 March, 2018
The descriptions are emotive and colorful. Your intellectual discussion on the state of vampiric decay is lucid and logical, lending an air of authenticity to your latest work. The scene of Tremen showering in the dark is both tactile and emotionally stimulating -- meaning, I have been there. And your added use of horror as counterpoint to romantic nostalgia was ideal. You reached for it and achieved your goal. Great work Keith. -- "The Magister 22:20, 29 March 2018 (MDT)"
Many thanks. More is more. Tremen walks in darkness of the soul. He is clearest when I evoke that. I wanted the tortured horror hero, it never helps to down play that. Keith 06:47 MAT 30 March 2018
Too long since your last entry, the character needs to breath more, let him out and he will grow. Keep up the good work, but write more often, even if the volume is less for the habit is everything. -- "The Magister 18:08, 1 May 2018 (MDT)"
Good work, keep it up. I am always looking forward to new entries. -- "The Magister 21:52, 2 May 2018 (MDT)"
Nice. Your recollection of that session is good and I like that you captured the flavor of the city. Solid work. -- "The Magister 22:04, 3 May 2018 (MDT)"
Your descriptions of the disciplines, specifically dominate is good for the reader and creates a more thrilling encounter. -- "The Magister 18:22, 4 May 2018 (MDT)"
You are building good habits, but you missed a part. The part about the video tape..." -- "The Magister 22:27, 7 May 2018 (MDT)"
You are in a hurry...he doesn't see the video tape until on the way out of the building on the first floor...unless my memory is out of whack. Keith 14:26 8 May 2018
