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I have suggested he write fiction as a additional hobby. I enjoy his writing. '''Brian 13:43, 27 March 2018''' | I have suggested he write fiction as a additional hobby. I enjoy his writing. '''Brian 13:43, 27 March 2018''' | ||
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| + | "Smiles" -- "The Magister 18:54, 27 March 2018 (MDT)" | ||
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| + | You are a great tease...but then that is the challenge of reading a story as it is being written. Well done my friend, you are a gifted writer. '''Keith 10:31, 9 May 2018''' | ||
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| + | ''j'apprécie que'' --"The Magister 19:21, 9 May 2018 (MDT)" | ||
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| + | Great additions...excellent use of my critique. '''Mist Guide 21:15, 14 January 2021 (MST)''' | ||
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| + | '''Jeanne Corinna Victor''' {''I would like to point out that this name is entirely French. Which makes me wonder why she came from the Netherlands.''}<br> | ||
| + | {Such are the vagueries of a story...perhaps much to know in this child's short histiore} '''Keith 23-07-2018 12:15 MST''' <br> | ||
| + | ------------- | ||
| + | '''Basics''' | ||
| + | --------- | ||
| + | Gender: Feminine<br> | ||
| + | Type: Child<br> | ||
| + | Nationality: Dutch<br> | ||
| + | Location: Gelderland, Netherlands<br> | ||
| + | Language: Dutch<br> | ||
| + | ----------- | ||
| + | '''Life & Times'''<br> | ||
| + | Age: 7<br> | ||
| + | Birth date: May 1, 1893 (2:28 AM)<br> | ||
| + | Birth Place: Apeldoorn<br> | ||
| + | Diminutive: Jeanette<br> | ||
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| + | '''Physical''' | ||
| + | --------- | ||
| + | Height: 128 cm / 4 ft 2 in<br> | ||
| + | Weight: 21.8 kg / 48.0 lbs<br> | ||
| + | Handedness: Right<br> | ||
| + | Hair: White Blond<br> | ||
| + | Eye Color: Blue / Green<br> | ||
| + | Blood type: O+<br> | ||
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| + | '''Future Outlook'''<br> | ||
| + | ------------ | ||
| + | Death date: August 1, 1950<br> | ||
| + | Lifespan: 57<br> | ||
| + | Cause of death: Cancer<br> | ||
| + | --- | ||
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| + | ''{"du berceau à la tombe"}'' -- "The Magister 18:35, 16 July 2018 (MDT)" | ||
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| + | ---- | ||
| + | ''I hit the halfway mark! Just 300,000 words or so to go.'' -- "The Magister 23:52, 25 July 2018 (MDT)" | ||
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| + | Ah the heat of sex...the drive to reproduce and feel the connection to the Other...that is the drive of humanity. Well described. '''Keith 8/14/2018 19:31 MST''' | ||
| + | ------ | ||
| + | Excellent installment. Bravo!''' Mist Guide 04:12, 30 November 2019 (MST)''' | ||
Latest revision as of 22:15, 14 January 2021
Excellent writing on the awakening of Ostanes.
Merci beaucoup -- "The Magister 20:41, 20 March 2018 (MDT)"
As you continue to write you make me feel like I failed to tell the story you unfold...I skimmed the edges, hinted at things that you are filling in beautifully, your dream sequence is fascinating and in line with the story I told. You are making some small writing errors, but it's all spelling and grammar at this point. Please don't be offended if I clean it a little as I come across those missteps. Your writing is enthralling. Keith 19:10, 26 March 2018
I have suggested he write fiction as a additional hobby. I enjoy his writing. Brian 13:43, 27 March 2018
"Smiles" -- "The Magister 18:54, 27 March 2018 (MDT)"
You are a great tease...but then that is the challenge of reading a story as it is being written. Well done my friend, you are a gifted writer. Keith 10:31, 9 May 2018
j'apprécie que --"The Magister 19:21, 9 May 2018 (MDT)"
Great additions...excellent use of my critique. Mist Guide 21:15, 14 January 2021 (MST)
Jeanne Corinna Victor {I would like to point out that this name is entirely French. Which makes me wonder why she came from the Netherlands.}
{Such are the vagueries of a story...perhaps much to know in this child's short histiore} Keith 23-07-2018 12:15 MST
Basics
Gender: Feminine
Type: Child
Nationality: Dutch
Location: Gelderland, Netherlands
Language: Dutch
Life & Times
Age: 7
Birth date: May 1, 1893 (2:28 AM)
Birth Place: Apeldoorn
Diminutive: Jeanette
Physical
Height: 128 cm / 4 ft 2 in
Weight: 21.8 kg / 48.0 lbs
Handedness: Right
Hair: White Blond
Eye Color: Blue / Green
Blood type: O+
Future Outlook
Death date: August 1, 1950
Lifespan: 57
Cause of death: Cancer
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{"du berceau à la tombe"} -- "The Magister 18:35, 16 July 2018 (MDT)"
I hit the halfway mark! Just 300,000 words or so to go. -- "The Magister 23:52, 25 July 2018 (MDT)"
Ah the heat of sex...the drive to reproduce and feel the connection to the Other...that is the drive of humanity. Well described. Keith 8/14/2018 19:31 MST
Excellent installment. Bravo! Mist Guide 04:12, 30 November 2019 (MST)
